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Peep4Life wrote: Big the cat 10 wrote: Gex VS Bug First of all, the Description and Interlude sections look fine and do a great job at explaining the connections of the two characters.

Both you and Toni’s analysis sections were pretty detailed and the some of the host dialogue was quite funny.

As for the fight itself, I think it was really well done. The choreography of the fight was great, along with the dialogue. I also liked the fact the Gex and Bug fought each other in different locations and additionally found the Ninja and Revenge of the Sith references to be very funny.

The results section was quite detailed and you used a number of specific examples of each character’s feats to justify why Gex won the battle, which was good to see.

The spelling, grammar and overall formatting of the page was pretty much on point. However, in terms of criticism, while you did use a lot of commas to separate the different sections of your long sentences in the fight section, the fact that some of your paragraphs were around 6 or 7 lines long and didn’t have any full stops, did make the battle a bit more difficult to read, so I’d recommend that you try and add more full stops in the battle sections of your future fights.

Overall, I’d give the battle a 9/10.

My version of Aquaman vs. Namor the Sub-Mariner. Okie dokie. Firstly, looking at the Interlude: I like it; it is snappy, and doesn't waffle on when it comes to describing the battle; it is possible to give away a lot in the interlude based on how we introduce the characters and I find it better when we don't do that.

Now, I'm gonna pretend I have never heard of Aquaman or Namor when I look at these analysis sections as it allows me to assess your analysis better. So, Aquaman: I like the joke about Aquaman 'sucking' because it is a relevant enough joke about the character that isn't cliche enough to be annoyingly repetitive.

You run down his lifting strength and reaction speed fairly briefly, but it's fine because the feats themselves are self explanatory; oil rigs are heavy, and bullets, Superman and Wonder Woman are fast af. I would have maybe used one relevant explanation as to why those particular feats are special though; mentioning how Superman has potential speeds that put typically high speeds to shame etc. Otherwise, it can sometimes look like we are giving them a statistic without real substance.

Again, Boomstick cracking a joke about going to the pet shop for Topo is well placed; these kinds of jokes break up meaty analysis sections, allowing for the reader to change pace from what can become blocky paragraphs of analysis. And the witty remark about the Water Hand is great! I think when you got into analysing it, you gave a solid enough representation and accounting of the hand so that even neutrals can understand what it does, why it is effective and why there are drawbacks; if we hype up a weapon too much, it sometimes feels like a (for lack of better words) an appreciation post rather than a summary etc.

Overall, your analysis of Aquaman gives us a nice brief backstory, and outlines a lot of effective feats he has under his belt and alongside some fair judgement of his weaknesses; I think you added a fair balance of weaknesses in his analysis because it gave nothing away in terms of how it would directly be effected in this battle.

So, we move on to Namor: Love the quick history lesson about him fighting alongside Captain America and Human Torch, and I love the joke referncing Little Mermaid; good ol' Boomstick banter!

I feel you did a much better job here explaining why Namor's feats were siginificant; he punched out Hulk several times- qualifying him as a more consistent combatant. On top of giving actual statistical distance for his throwing strength. These help us understand that if we see Namor lifting something for a throw, then Aquaman better hope he can get the heck out of dodge etc.

I feel that there are a lot more instances where Namor is shown as a badass based on the analysis you did for him; as a neutral, I'm looking at this guy that is a challenge for the likes of Hulk and Thor so I have my reasons to think "Damn, this guy is a threat" going into the battle. Not that I don't get that impression off Aquaman's research, but that aura of badassery permeates Namor's analysis.

Again, the Iluminati joke is well placed as it serves as a breakup point between chunks of analysis, allowing us to digest the character's skills and what we have just been told.

I like the sweet little run down of his flaws; comparing him to notoriously flawed characters helps neutrals draw fairer comparisons and conclusions in their heads. Vegeta is a recognisable name, so I like that you drew focus to him- and essentially pointed out the similarities. Though, that takes the chance on whether or not people know the person you compare him to, but it's no biggie.

The Fight: I love the set up; it reeks of bravado and pride, meaning there is a tension that makes us want to read on and see who can kick who's fishy backside the most. I love the use of onomatopoeia as it gives the comic book effects of action and noise.

I like the feeling out proccess where Aquaman is visibly having to adjust to his new foe's strength in this case; he clearly is not expecting that strength but it is not a dead giveaway nor a sinch in disadvantage for him yet.

I feel the dialogue works well; your portrayal of the pair is amazingly done; the interactions feel natural and is something I could envision animated/acted out before my eyes. I also like how observant Namor is; it looks like you took the time to make sure both Aquaman and Namor wanted to get a full assessment of one another before trying something bold.

The use of manipulating the environment was masterful; it helps show the intelligence of the character and the flaw of another- allowing himself to be baited into the narrow battlefield. But incredibly, even at this point, we have no idea who might pull out ahead- which is a feeling I love about Death Battles written this way; the suspense drives us to read on... Unless you're the kind of guy who just scrolls to the result and leaves. But I'm enjoying reading at this point, and as I said, am unsure on who is gonna win.

The changes of location allowed for more stylish choreography, meaning the actions felt fresher as opposed to repeated sequences and interactions- very well done.

The battle is lengthy, and kept me guessing until the very end; which is amazing. Now, let's see the conclusion.

Boomstick eats humble pie- I like it.

The conclusion works because you draw on their similarities, but why Aquaman is ultimately above Namor in this instant; his inferior telepathy for example and the use of a relevant example further solidify the point.

I also feel you gave a fair judgement on Namor's advantages, but again, they were overshadowed by Aquaman's superiority and simply having an answer. And the explanation of why Aquaman's trump card topped Namor's was a satisfying conclusion, and (because a neutral would have to take your word for it) the discussion is a believable one. The conclusion also reflects exactly what we saw in the fight, which isn't as easy as it sounds.

Overall, Big, I give this a solid 8 out of 10. With a few tweaks, and fleshed out relevant examples in Aquaman's analysis, you are on for a winner. I feel the result was judged fairly, and the battle had me gripped until the conclusion. Well done!

If it's no trouble, please could someone have a look at my Kurome vs Weiss battle?

Thanks.

Thank you for the detailed and helpful review, Peep! I greatly appreciate it :)