Board Thread:Wiki Management/@comment-27150398-20180211135035/@comment-26153757-20180513081959

ThingsisDeath wrote: i removed the spoiler on my quote reply to you too, you will need to removing the SPOILER in your reply quote to me also I removed the spoiler on my reply and also I just read your battle. Let me tell you everything that was bad before I say what was good. Before anything else, I have to be honest and say that your grammar needs a LOT of improvement. The entire page was a little hard to read because your grammar is just really bad. I'm assuming that either you're a young child OR that English is not your first language and you're still learning it. Also, there are plenty of spelling errors as well and you don't need to end each section by literally announcing the end of the section. Lastly, the results section was poorly made because it didn't have any real reasoning for why Niko won other than just saying that he is more skilled and you didn't even explain how he is more skilled, you just said that he is "more skilled somehow". You also mentioned completely pointless things in the results that have nothing to do with the battle like claiming that Vito has a better story than Niko. First of all, not only is that an opinion but also that has nothing to do with who would win in a fight. Having a better story obviously i'snt going to help a character win in a fight against another character. Also, saying things like "Rule! no mafia fanboys here!" is just really unnecessary and is just a way to trigger fanboys.

Now I will get on with what was good about it. Aside from the terrible grammar throughout the whole thing, the analysis portions were decent and so was the fight. The analysis sections while short, gave me a good enough amount of information about all of the weapons, skills, and experiences of both characters. The fight while it was also short, it was an okay fight. I liked that in the beginning they both had to escape from the police during their shootout and the end of the fight was a decent finish with the knife fighting, shooting, and hand to hand combat all being executed in a way that was fitting enough for an ending.

Overall, a lot about your writing needs to be improved. Mainly your grammar and spelling.