Board Thread:Wiki Management/@comment-27150398-20180211135035/@comment-27518422-20190324230456

'''I apoologise for being late. But let's get on with this appreciation. '''

'''Locus vs Widowmaker - again, like I did for Big - I'll assume I know nothing about either character to judge the efficiency of the research. '''

'''Firstly, I personally like the description; it's short, to the point, and the scoreboard sets up a compelling match as I kinda like when there is more than one bout between franchises. I'd perhaps have listed the connections here, that doesn't always need to be the case. '''

'''Especially considering the connections being outlined in the intro instead. Again, not much needs saying as all you are doing is introducing the characters. '''

Locus' Analysis: 

'''Personally, I think the analysis was treated more as an inventory check. That's not a bad thing per say, as different writers will have different ways of setting up analysis. You touched briefly on Locus' history but I feel I personally would have gone into a little more depth. Just explaining briefly a few plot points and events that may have changed him. '''

'''As for how you set out the exploration of weapons, I was happy to see detailed analysis of clip sizes and his overall weapon varieties but I felt like the praise he received from Carolina can be quite empty; if we don't know Carolina's skill then it means that the compliment means significantly less than if it were a recognisable character outside that series. That said, it would be taken differently if I were familiar with RvB and Carolina.'''

'''The lay-out was fine as the shorter paragraph lengths weren't overwhelming and blocky; sometimes it can be harder to read through walls of text than it is to read through lots of smaller passages. However, one slight nit pick from me is the repetition of starting a lot of the sentences with Locus. Again, it's not a bad thing but I feel repetition can be a little daunting on a mind when reading. '''

'''You picked out relevant and effective feats of speed and durability too; as this battle is a gun fight, it made a lot of sense you mentioned his survival in previous gun fights as opposed to some feat that would hold no weight. It also felt like you did a good job at hyping the character and the whole analysis felt like an advert for him and proving the point that this guy is indeed a badass. '''

Widowmaker's Analysis:

'''Again, I felt the back story could have been fleshed out just a little bit, but that is my personal preference. Other than that it pretty much hit the nail on the head of the character that is Widowmaker. '''

'''The outlining of weapons felt significantly shorter than Locus but it makes sense because you acknowledge that her arsenal is known for being pretty small. Again, you picked out relevant feats of strength and durability - not just for her, but for her equipment as well. Interestingly though, in Locus' analysis you flat out call him a badass but nothing like that in Widowmaker's. I've nothing against that, but I'll explain it later on. '''

'''The lay out was fine here as well; shorter paragraphs as opposed to mountains of text. The reading of this analysis flows better with one exception being repetition again. I feel it is more noticeable here as Widowmaker is a longer word than Locus so my mind's voice kinda drones over the word a bit. Again, not outright a flaw but something that I would have been nagged about in English Language at school, so yeah xD'''

FIGHT:

'''Intro was short, but we didn't need it to be a novel. Well paced, and I like the portrayal of the characters as it matches the expectation set from their analysis. '''

'''The battle begins with Widowmaker being very comfortable, which aligns with the research done on her. I'm personally a fan of prose rather than script when it comes to action, but I understand why people would use script. '''

'''I like the fight's length for each paragraph as it gives enough time for the sequences therein to properly unfold. The action was fairly back and forth, although I would say it was kinda never in question that Locus would win. That's not a bad thing though, and I have nothing against predictability should the battle hit the nail on the head in the other aspects. '''

'''I also disagree a little with how Widowmaker's death came to be; she was billed as smart, efficient and very top of the line. I don't feel that based on what analysis we were given that she should let her guard down the way she did. Whether that influences the result is irrelevant, but just a nit pick. '''

Conclusion:

'''Locus winning was never in question, and I like that you address that without insulting Widowmaker. The conclusion matches precisely what we witnessed in the fight but I'm not going to get involved with the scaling - you know why - but as for the viable feats and tools at their disposal, I think the analysis was spot on. '''

'''But another thing that gave the game away was you calling Locus badass whereas Widowmaker got nothing. Nine time out of ten that results in the praised character winning. I'm not sure it's intentional (and I dare say I've done it myself) but it just feels like it happens all the time. That said, I think you mostly did both characters enough justice and your conclusion was in depth and well thought through. '''

'''I'd give you a 6.5 out of 10. '''

If anyone fancies it, I'd appreciate a glance over Galen Marek vs Raiden