Board Thread:Wiki Management/@comment-27150398-20180211135035/@comment-5035900-20190609131941

Ryu's section covered him fairly well, though Jack's section felt much briefer by comparison. And not so much a criticism as just personal preference, but I find it helps to make both combatants seem less unstoppable by at least listing some of their weaknesses or flaws before concluding their sections.

As for the battle, I believe the exchange prior was pretty spot-on for both characters. Afterwards, the writing seemed a little all over the place. I understand it can be difficult to write out a combatants' choreography, but several sections would have benefited greatly from it.

To summarize one section, you state that Ryu took a swing at Jack, Jack felt pain, but kept going, they exchanged blows, both nearly showed their full potential, and Ryu struggled. I wanted to know how and where Ryu struck, the steps Jack took to keep going through the pain, the kinds of blows they exchanged, the ways they showed their potential, and at what point of their bout that Ryu began to struggle. Detailing the attacks, injuries, and emotions would greatly help in giving that particular part more flair and emotion, as otherwise I don't have a clear picture to work with.

Conclusion-wise, the victor made clear sense considering their stats, and I do appreciate how you insisted that a character defeating their greatest enemy due to said enemy being weak to their weapon had no factor in the outcome of this battle.

Overall, there is room to improve. Fixing up some of the grammar and adding more detail would help to give your battle polish. Keep pushing forward.

I have a bit of an older fight: Cyrax vs. Fulgore (note: I did not write Fulgore's section myself)

And I have my latest: Cole MacGrath vs Alex Mercer