Board Thread:Wiki Management/@comment-27150398-20180211135035/@comment-30408599-20181216191529

(Buneary's analysis ended up short cause I summarized her moveset. Lopmon's was long cause I had to cover each digivolution. I've since learned to summaize Digimon movesets as well, but including that many different forms is always gonna be long I think, but I can certainly work on improving it, thanks)

Now I'm gonna get this out of the way first, I've never been a fan of "Paper Mario vs some alternate version of a character" fights, but that's just my biased opinion.

Classic Sonic's analysis is pretty good, even though I disagree with a few points.

Paper Mario's analysis is alright, but similar to my own fight that I reviewed, there are too many sentences that say "also". I also think you should order the points you make. For example, most people start with backstory, then move to abilities & equipment, then feats, then faults. You seem to do this for the most part, but I feel like mentioning something like Mario's transformations after mentioning his Papercraft form is a little weird, & like you should save the big thing for last. Nothing major, just a nitpick.

Another nitpick, this fight starts similarly to Luigi vs Nightwing, I personally like to keep things different from each other. If I had to change it, I might have Mario stealing the color from rings or a Chaos Emerald.

As for the fight itself, there's not enough follow-through. As I'm sure you know, writing requires you to be more specific than animating as animators have several ways to convey that a hit lands, while writers have to actually say/write something that conveys it. For example, you say "Mario jumps into the air and turns into a paper plane, he dive-bombs Sonic, who was still recovering, he then turns around and attempts to dive-bomb Sonic again." Nowhere here does it say Sonic was hit by the dive-bomb, we just have to assume based on context. Instead, you could say "he dive-bombs Sonic, who was still recovering, knocking him to the ground before attempting again." That's just how I would write it. Also, this "He sees his hands starting to lose colour and blasts Mario away". Sonic wears white gloves, he wouldn't see his hands. That's more just a funny error to me though.

While I agree with the outcome, it's not for the reasons you gave, but I won't get into that cause it doesn't have to do with the quality of your fight.

Overall, it was good, but not much more than that.

5/10

I'm personally not a big fan of this one, but I want to see what people think: Heckyl vs Magneto