Board Thread:Wiki Management/@comment-27150398-20180211135035/@comment-5035900-20200122025107

An idea I've seen pitched for years. In regards to your take on it, I can't really offer a rating as I'm kinda terrible at that kind of thing, but I will go over it:

For starters, let's discuss your hosts Dym and Yar. Perhaps it's because I'm so accustomed to Wiz and Boomstick as a default, but I couldn't really get a feel for either of your hosts' personalities. One oddity in particular was Dym going over a lot feats followed by Yar shouting he (Dym) had interrupted him without any indication Yar had been interrupted beforehand. Maybe if I read more of your works, I might, but first impressions, I couldn't grasp their characteristics.

Onto the character sections, the order in which information was laid out seemed a bit mixed. I don't believe every DB writer has to necessarily adhere to the show's format, but theirs of origin/background, abilities, feats, and faults helps in regards to organisation. Rocky's seemed to recount the events of 1-4 chronologically when it could have been summarized and saved his victories for the feats and Little Mac's had Donkey Kong brought up before you even covered Mac's abilities.

The fight, I could say is the strong point. It had a fair share of moments and a good ending showcasing the toll it took on the victor. A minor thing, but switching out Mac and Rocky with things like "his opponent" or "the Italian Stallion" would help to make it less repetitive.

As for the outcome, it's agreeable. I find Little Mac tricky as some believe him to be a powerhouse who tanks building-busting blows, which contradicts the general conceit of him being a somewhat glass cannon who specializes in avoiding hits from and tire out physically stronger opponents, gameplay or otherwise. Still, I don't think you went too overboard in your appraisal of both combatants.

Overall, I see potential for improvement. Just work on ironing out the grammar, fleshing out the hosts, reorganizing the info, and adding bits to the fight and your take on Mac VS Rocky could be a real knockout (boxing pun intended).