Board Thread:Wiki Management/@comment-27150398-20180211135035/@comment-30408599-20181231185432

Zacisawesome101 - Thanks for all that feedback, there are clearly improvements I can make to my fight, & I definitely plan on doing so once I get the chance. I also noticed that some of the flaws I've pointed out to others are present in this battle, & I'm guessing that's either cause I didn't have enough experience, or I was too eager to display my research. Yeah, looking back, this can be improved.

With that out of the way, I'll take a look at your fight.

Description, Interlude, & connections all look good.

Ice Climbers' analysis was short & sweet, giving a good debreifing of history, feats, & abilities. Great job.

Baby Bros' analysis was longer, but still sweet. It had a natural flow to it, & did a good job going over all the points I listed for the Ice Climbers, except that it seemed to disclude a good few abilities/equipment, like the fire flower for example.

Moving on to the Pre-Battle, I actually have a problem with this bit:

"The Ice Climbers retrieve the mallets, while Baby Mario & Luigi checked up on their adult counterparts. The babies pull out their iron hammers and rush forward clashing with the Ice Climbers, the babies jump back and get into a fighting stance."

It just says they clash, which isn't very descriptive. It seems like your trying to say the babies attack the climbers, & the climbers block the hit just in time, then the fight starts. However, it doesn't say the climbers blocked, it just says "clashing". I only make a big deal cause I got really confused when I first read this part.

The fight itself was well choreographed. It wasn't great, but it was good enough to be enjoyable. It also displayed the fight as being pretty even, which is an important part of any fight imo.

As for the results, they make sense based on your analyses, but it does make me question how much research went into this fight. I sadly disagree, but that's the biggest flaw for me, & it's only subjective.

Overall, a surprisingly great job, but some music would've been nice.

8/10

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