Board Thread:Wiki Management/@comment-27150398-20180211135035/@comment-30408599-20190729150639

Starting with Dante's analysis, I think it was very good. I know nothing about Dante, but you seem to have covered his history, abilities, & feats pretty well. I especially like that you calculated some of his feats yourself, there are surprisingly few people who do that. The only issue I see is the lack of any speed feats, but judging by your results, I can see why. Death's analysis has a few a grammar errors, but nothing major. Besides that, this analysis was just as good as Dante's, especially considering I didn't know anything about him either. The premise for the fight is a bit odd. To me it was basically, "I need your horse" "No" "Okay I'll just kill you" "No" (Though honestly I worded it pretty funny). It's not bad, it just seemed a bit petty. For all I know this is perfectly within character & you nailed the accuracy (Which is always great imo). Doesn't matter though, it works fine. Onto the fight itself, I think it could've used some music to set the mood, but to each their own. There were a few grammar errors, but again nothing major. There are a few parts that're confusing, like when Death dodges Dante's second attack in the first paragraph. You mention the dodge before you mention the attack, which confused me a bit upon first reading. It also seems like you use the term "bore down" too much. I think it might be better to mix up the words a bit to make reading the fight more interesting & engaging. I didn't quite like the part where Dante & Death used their super forms, as it simply didn't last long enough. However, it seems like you simply had other plans for where the fight would go, and that's fine, as I quite liked the ending. Though personally, I think I would've had their super forms fight for awhile before they fell into the chasm. I will commend you for writing a fairly evenly matched fight, as it's pretty boring when one character is dominating & not giving the other a fair chance to do anything, even if it is accurate to the research. I particularly liked when Dante countered Death's spirits with his cross, it's a good representation of how Dante is already experienced with this kind of thing. I also like when Death uses his mace to stop the momentum of being hit by Dante's Divine Armor, it makes the fight more dynamic & displays Death's skill in battle. I also really like the part where Dante attempts to absolve Death as, up until now, it seemed like Death had the upper hand in this battle, so it was nice to see the tables turned, even if it was for a short time. Another criticism I should bring up is the blocks of text. I've heard this in college, & even on the wiki, big blocks of text should be broken up into smaller paragraphs to make reading them easier. It allows readers to easily scroll through the fight by reading one paragraph at a time rather than reading the equivalent of 4 paragraphs in one block. However, I've been told a few times that I should break up my text, only to find that I didn't want to, so you don't really have to change this aspect, it's just for consideration, & maybe future reference. The finisher was pretty well done, & fairly climactic. My only issue is that your description of the slash that appears on (spoiler) was hard to understand, & it seemed to be due to grammar errors. The results were pretty good, & I agree with the outcome based on your research. Though, it seems like you only mentioned advantages for (spoiler) & none for D-, I mean (spoiler). Based on my own experiences, even the most outmatched losers usually have 1 or 2 advantages, even if they're largely insignificant (My fight below is a pretty good example of this). Judging by the info on (spoiler), I would think he'd have at least one advantage, but I guess that's not too important. Overall, this was a pretty good fight. 7/10 My fight: Bionicat VS Cyborg Kuro-chan