Thread:Panzysoldat/@comment-37644871-20191117011344/@comment-31617896-20191211040724

The hook was weighted, though. Wouldn't that factor into the equation? Things.
 * I know you said that you were focusing on 1974 Billy, but given that you're using the remake Billy's last name, why's there no mention of the remake Billy?
 * I feel like rather than just starting off with Billy, you should mention the setting. Something like this. "One night in a sorority house, a group of college girls decided to have a party while their sorority mother was away. Little did they know, that someone had crept into the attic of the house. That person was a mysterious man named Billy, who seemed to have been targeting the house with obscene phone calls."
 * I would find a smoother way to transition between topics.
 * Also, correction on Chapman. Billy didn't take his brother Ricky out of the car. Billy hid in the bushes, but the thief didn't hurt Ricky for some reason.
 * Remember to check how many words it is.

Other than that, it's looking good so far.