Thread:Theundertalefan355/@comment-7424710-20171206020755/@comment-7424710-20171206024646

Adjectives or anything more descriptive could help. Adding more to the pre-fight could always add some variety. You could always just extend your fight as well, add some extra hits, some extra moves, that sort of thing.

Also, you need to correct your grammar (such as your/you're), learn your sentence structure and not do this -> (Wiz:[text] instead of Wiz: [text] or [sentence1].[sentence2] instead of [sentence1]. [sentence2]), and considering Doomfist's bio is the only one that doesn't have this issue, it makes me a bit suspicious. Finally, you need to learn when to use commas, you'll end up making run-on sentences

INCORRECT: In the charge Godzilla breaks Metroplex's blaster.

CORRECT: In the charge, Godzilla breaks Metroplex's blaster.

You have a lot to perfect when it comes to writing.