Talk:DmC Dante Vs Zero (Drakengard 3)/@comment-5035900-20171020082745

For starters, let me just say how pleasant it is to read a battle with DmC Dante where the theme isn't "completely unlikable characters" and where nothing is stated to put down him or his game in comparison to the original Dante and series. In fact, your theme of "polarizing, but skilled and badass" is one of the better themes for anything featuring DmC Dante.

Just a few criticisms, though. DmC Dante's section is quite massive. You more-or-less told the entire story of DmC from the first level to the last, which isn't really necessary. I'd say cut to the chase, go over the weapons without every origin, and then mention all his specific accomplishments when discussing feats (like how you had done so with Zero's section). It'll help so readers aren't tempted to skip through it.

And overall, the grammar could use some work. Mainly just cleaning up the text, cutting out unnecessary descriptions, and some misplaced words.

But aside from that, the battle wasn't half-bad. DmC Dante seemed fairly on-point personality-wise as opposed to others who try to play him off as completely unlikable, so props for that. So while it could use some tidying up, not a bad read by any means and I think a good example of how to use DmC Dante.

PS: Your last music cue at 5:54 needs a small fix, as it's past the video's length.