Board Thread:Wiki Management/@comment-27150398-20180211135035/@comment-27150398-20190331140021

Bubsy vs. Gex 

Description and Interlude: The Description only consisted of the words ‘failed mascots’ and was therefore very brief, so for future reference I’d personally recommend that you should try and make your Descriptions a bit more detailed by stating what franchises the combatants are from and mentioning more than one of the things that the combatants you use have in common. I’ve listed an example of what I’m trying to explain below, so that you can get a better idea of what I’m talking about and how you can go about writing your Descriptions in the future.

Aquaman vs. Namor - “Marvel vs DC! Which young trident-wielding hybrid King of Atlantis and master of the oceans will come out on top?!”

Keep in mind that this is just how I prefer to write Description, so if you would prefer to keep your Descriptions brief then that’s fine as well.

The Interlude was a bit brief, but ok overall.

Character bios: Both bios had lots of detailed information about each character which showed me that you had clearly done your research on both combatants. The information on both character’s backstories was detailed enough and the interactions between Necro, Mercer and Bubsy were pretty funny as well.

The Battle itself: The reason for Bubsy and Gex fighting was reasonable, the fight itself was pretty detailed, the fight render looked great and the choreography was well done. Bubsy’s puns were also quite funny and Bubsy’s death wasn’t too unrealistic considering Gex’s arsenal, which was good.

The Results: They did a good job at justifying Gex’s victory in a fairly concise (but fairly detailed) manner. You also referenced specific feats to help back your points which is always great to see.

Criticism: While there were a few spelling and grammar mistakes throughout the page, the battle was done pretty well overall and I don’t think it deserves any other forms of criticism. It should be noted though, that your spelling and grammar has definitely improved compared with your spelling and grammar in your previous battles.

Overall, I’d give this battle an 8/10.

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